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Thu Apr 14, 2011 9:41 pm
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Here is my session from this TRN. I am hoping for feedback and advice.
I started doing my sessions in Finnish and this is maybe 5th one done in Finnish (well a mix of Finnish and English since sometimes words just come in English...)

I wrote down the time at the start of the ST, because my sessions are always slower than adviced and I wanted to find out where that time goes...

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Let's start with your S2[Site]

You have a number of dimensions listed that are actually AOL

partially, chaotic, and disorganized are not dimensions.

Don't underline your AIs.

Nothing wrong with your S3[Site].

AOLs are declared properly when you do decide they are trash.'

All those arrows on your analytical sketches better be spontaneous archetypes added after you sketched out the dimensions in S2 or you are in big trouble. I don't recall seeing a single dimension declared that corresponds to motion.

Do understand that motion and densities get lumped in with dimensions.

Review the descriptor list. You are doing more things right than wrong. Post another session soon after implementing corrective actions.

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Thank you for your comments, kocmodpom. I might be in big trouble indeed.

I have a few questions:

1. partially - If something is standing in shallow water, how would you describe that the lower part of the object is in the water and upper part isn't?

2. Don't these words mean that something is moving?

transforming - I meant with this that the shape is changing
opening
falls - should have used falling
exiting
fast - How could I draw this without using arrows?
down - When I read the word descriptor list I thought up and down were for movement into those directions.

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Sun Jun 19, 2011 4:43 pm
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partially, transforming, opening, exiting are best reserved as intangibles in S4. They are not S2 dimensions and should be declared as AOL in S2.

It is fine to use arrows with fast, but I saw arrows in places where you did not declare the dimension fast.


Up and down can refer to spatial orientation, not just movement.

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Post Re: [ 7933 / 8431 ]
The Session Number is wrong:

Thread-Title:[ 7933 / 8431 ]

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Junk Session. :|


Tue Jun 21, 2011 2:56 pm
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Incorrect. Not a junk session session at all. It defaults to an "open search" in that context.

Care to take a guess on what you got in this session as an open search?

Nevertheless, the TRN has been corrected. An odd occurrence of dyslexia. Thanks for letting me know.

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Open search... If I sketched some newsworthy event I have no clue what it is because I don't follow the news.

I have done now six sessions after this one. I think I have most of that stuff that you talked about fixed. I find it hard to make instantaneous decisions about words being good or AOL though.

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Look for similarities between your session, and those in Project Noodle and Project Pickles.

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Post Re: [ 7933 / 8341 ]
Please provide feedback.

Thank you.

Jessie :)

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Here is my latest practice session. I would appreciate your review and comments.

I think I am going to next start DVD2, unless the pros advise me otherwise.

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